Love is the worst thing ever, it blows . It can ruin your life or day .you never get any where near the person you want. Last but not least it can tear families apart. Love is not important because friends disagree, family disagrees, and
You could get heart-broken.
A lot of times friends will disagree about your love. They might think the girl/guy is stupid and critisize ever thing he/she dose. Your friends also might think he/she is ugly and compare them to someone even uglier. Sometime you’re the person with the boy/girl friend who friends talk about you. Friends make love a royal pain.
Family, like friends, can make love be a royal pain too. Your father, if you’re a girl, may have a “talk” with your boyfriend about responsibility and bringing you home on time and blah,blah,blah. You mom will always tell you how you can do better all the time. Finally your siblings make fun of you for having a boyfriend. Family make love have to be a secret, or else...
Heartbreak is the most feard and revered part of a relationship. People are always afraid that there lover, per-say, is going to find someone else. There’s always a chance that the person, you are dating, would move to so place in brazil. Most of all there’s the possibility that you could fall in love with someone else and break their heart. Heartbreak is what makes love pointless.
All because of friends, family, and heartbreak, what’s the point? Love is just a nightmare. The point of it means nothing. This somewhat of a meaningful essay tells you why love is pointless, meaningless, and a waist of time.
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OK the first sentence was very interesting. I kind of agree with you, and I kind of don't. My essay was how love is a good thing, but there are some parts of your essay that I really agreed with! So do you never want to fall in love?
Wow! I thought your intro. was great! It really pulled me in to find out why. I thought your word choice was really great. You used sarcasim in a way that helped you proove your point. I loved how you put in " the talk", it made me laugh! I think you could have made your story flow a little bit better. It was kind of all going fast, instead of smooth/ steadily, but I thought overall, it was an excellent essay!
What you're saying here, is that love is a complete waste of your, and everyone else’s' time. 'Heartbreak is the most feared and revered part of a relationship.' This was a really good topic sentence for this paragraph. It tells the point of the paragraph and gives a strong outlook on the subject of heart-break. It uses creative word choice and is actually pretty true. 'Family make love have to be a secret, or else... ' This sentence doesn't really flow well with the essay, because it sort of sounds like your willing to keep a relationship a secret, not that you just don't have time for love. And ending with or else... leaves me hanging slightly and I want to know what or else is. Your future essays will be better if you try to make your intro a little more general in the beginning, but the ending thesis works well. Also, you might want to pay a little more attention to your spelling and capitalization. Your future essays will be good because you are good at stating your strong ideas and making a good point. You use pretty good word choice and the essay flows well.
I really liked your whole essay, you got your point accross: love is pointless. Your first paragraph is good but doesn't really grab my attention. You kind of start out with your thesis and thats the only thing in your intro, you should start a little bigger then get narrower. I really like your sentence: "family can make love be a royal pain". It used really good word choice! Your future essays will be better if you provide more to the intro. . . overall good job!
hey I loved your essay.I liked how it grabed me at the begining.I also liked you detail and word choice.
i understand that you don't think that love is good, you made that very clear. I liked that you gave the point of the essay at the beginning. You did a little bit of repeating in the essay and you made it a little bit annoying. I'm not quite sure if you had nothing else to say or something else. Unless you wanted it to be repetative, in which case you need a little more practice. Your future essays will be better if you don't repeat yourself and your future essays will be great because you really stick to your topic.
I think your right about love it is a nightmare and
it is pointless and I might just be saying this but I have never been in love also.
the begging of you'r essay rocked! i like how you said the "talk". But towards the end you lost my attention, because you kept on swithching subjects and i couldnt keep up. Your essay talks about peoples life which is true, to what you were saying in the begging. When you said,"or else" i wanted to know what "or else" was so you should have gave an example. When you say love is a waste of everyones times,and its the most feared thing that anybody knows, that got my attention but i wantede to know why people were scared of love. You chose a hard topic but you pulled it off!it was good!
I liked your essay but it was a little too weird in some areas but other than that it was a good essay in all next time try not too be too sarcastic and next time you essay will be perfect.
Your introduction automaticly caught my eye. You really know how to grab a readers attention. I somewhat agree with you, but not entirely. At times I think that love can be a great thing, but your point is maken that heart break is really hard and families can be split apart. You have a lot of humor. Like sweet stuf 5 said, when you put in "The Talk", that made your writing funny. But your point mainly is that love is stupid, a waste of time and also other peoples time. One thing I might seggest to work on is your capitalization. But you have a really strong writers voice. You keep your reader in suspence, I know you kept me in suspence! Keep up your good writing! Just work on your grammar!
wow, this was a really good essay! I was imediatly drawn to it, just reading the title!! The first sentence was really grabbing. It really drew me in!! You had a lot of spelling mistakes on simple words like 'does' and your instead of you in the family paragraph. All in all, your essay was really good!
Althought i disagree with it there's no getting around that this is a great essay. You did have a lot of typos in it, remember, the dictionary is your friend. You used words and phrases correctly, which suprised me since not many people seem capable of this. THe intro needed work, while it did pull me in it felt empty, like it needed a lot more details. One thing you're doing right is pulling people into your essay. One thing that needs work is your neglecting of the spell-checking option.
I totally disagree! I think your essay was good because your point was proven, but I dont think love is pointless. You had good structure and was well organized, butyou could check your spelling and grammer more often. Love is a part of life and i think you'll change your mind when you find someone you really like. well, good job.
So does that mean that you will never fall in love, Or we shouldn't either? I think your essay was well organised and proved you points! I also think you were very negative about realtionships. I thought this just refered to you, and not to everyone else. You also had a very strong opening statement. Your future essay would be better if you were a little more positive about your topic.
I disagree with this statement, because you would be lonley all the time without a partner. Sure they might break your heart, but that is life. You can live through it.
your essay was really good and I really liked the topic sentance. you also have great word choice. i do agree with you that love is pointless you also proved your point and you essay was sweet and to the point
love is pointless your right son cuz im a playa
hey! okay i definetely can understand where you're coming from..but then again love can be the most wonderful thing in the world! I like how you addressed all of your points on how love is pointless, but it might have been nice if you would have mentioned an aspect of on how love can sometimes, depending on the situation, be a good thing. But your introduction was probably the best part of your essay, because either someone that agreed with you or disagreed would want to know whether they agree or disagree. But anyway good job and next time just try to talk about the good and the bad aspects of love!
Great essay. I loved your points. Although im not sure i agreee with you i lived the points you made. In some of the sentences i agreee with you. I know lover hurts you but i don't think its pointless.
AWESOME!!! I have to admit that was a great story especially your into! you got right to the point. your story got my attention. good jobb!
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