What affects your future? The past dose affects your future. The pat affects every thing in your life. If you do one thing bad it could mess up your life. Or if your do just one little thing good it could make your life the best. The past dose affects your future because one thing can make your life very bad, make your life really great, and you can mess up someone else’s life or make it great.
One little thing can mess your life up. You could do one little thing that you don’t think that it would do something but in the future it will make you’re live very bad. Like if you did something to one of your parents that make them not believe you then in the footer one of them wouldn’t want to believe you. And the biggest thing is if you lie to someone that will mess up your life a lot if you life. So you just should think before you do your say, because it might make your life really bad in the end.
You could do one thing that you think will not affect but your future will be great. Like doing something that you don’t even think of it but that little thing will be great for you in the future. Especially doing your homework or going to college. Even if you do something bad if you tell the truth that will help you.
Not everything affects you it could affect any one. One little careless thing could make someone’s life great or make it crap. If you lie to someone or tell him or her something out their that could really mess them up. Or if someone needs help and you don’t help them ether emotional or physically, that could be bad for him or her. You could do something nice to someone to help him or her get back on their feet and make them shine. It should make you fell good unless you have a cold heart.
I hope you under stand that the past dose affect your future because that was three great reasons to believe it. So next time just think what you do because it could make someone’s or your life crap.
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your intro started off a little rough but you saved it at the end by saying make it greati really like the whole mess up your life thing yeah it was cool because people can really relate to that
hey I loved your essay.I liked how it grabed me at the begining.I also liked you detail and word choice.
This is good! but it's very repetitive, I feel like the only thing that you told me was to help people so that their lives don't turn out like crap. I would love it if you would add some more details and give me some more reasons either to help people out more, or give me some more ideas on how to help make peoples' lives easier! But I do like the idea of the essay! I think it's a great start.
I thought your essay was confusing. Especially the part when you said "You could do one thing that you think will not affect your future but your future will be great." You had a great ending thesis, but I think you should check your spelling and grammar. I thought you had a really great detail, but again I thought it was really confusing. I would recommend that you re-read your essay to make sure it makes sence or not. I'm not trying to be mean or anything, but it really was confusing.
I really like your intro to your essay. you really put a lot into it to make it sound just right. Make sure that in your following essays you check your spelling. Im your essays to come...maybe you should give some more details to support what you are trying to tell the reader. Good job overall!
I liked your essay but the only problem was the intro it had some spelling errors but the ending was great i like the last paragraph
This story needed to be revised by spell check. There were a couple words that were not spelled right, like does, you didn't spell does right, you spelled it dose. Also I think that you should have talked about how making a decsision can ruin yours or someone elses life. It seemed like all you talked about is how your past can make someone elses life "crap." Other than that it was ok, in my opinion.
I liked the beginning It started out o.k. But after that I didn't get the rest of the story though. I liked the ending sentence though. I look forward to your next essay.
i can totaly agree with 'one little thing can mess up your life." if we don't do some things then others won't happen and vise versa. you know what i am saying? we will never know what will affect our lives for better or for worse, so sometimes we don't try new things or we do try new things. the only suggestion i have is to check spelling
yuor essay had a lot of feeling, and it sounded like it came from your heart, a bet a lot of people could relate to your writing. i loved it! keep up the great work.
the past does affect your future. this essay was great. It sounded like you really meant what you said. i'm glad you added what you felt. i agree that one thing can mess up your whole life but this essay did not mess up mine
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